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Post by ahmedcrow on Nov 21, 2016 19:20:47 GMT
When you see yourself in the mirror, You think it's your image But the mirror can be a window to another side And your image is another somebody who is like you And he is of that side He looks to you as you do to him.
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Poem I
Nov 21, 2016 19:40:16 GMT
Post by peter2 on Nov 21, 2016 19:40:16 GMT
So what does this other person say to you?
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Poem I
Nov 23, 2016 15:00:56 GMT
Post by ahmedcrow on Nov 23, 2016 15:00:56 GMT
Look my friend peter, I'm trying to write small poems in english, you know I'm not native speaker, it's a challenge to me, but english is good language, poems in english have a taste.
I know you think poem is not finished or it was more good if I continoued in the peom and described what that man in mirror said. The poem was an imaginatory scene.
By the way, it's good that I see you again because I thought you left the forum.
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Poem I
Nov 23, 2016 22:12:22 GMT
Post by peter2 on Nov 23, 2016 22:12:22 GMT
>if I continued in the poem and described what that man in mirror said
Does he have something to communicate to you?
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Poem I
Nov 24, 2016 18:04:25 GMT
Post by ahmedcrow on Nov 24, 2016 18:04:25 GMT
I noted that you care in this poem, so that I completed it for you, I hope you like it, nothing is real in this poem(remember).
When you see yourself in the mirror, You think it's your image But the mirror can be a window to another side And your image is another somebody who is like you And he is of that side He looks to you as you do to him. His eyes are saying that he knows what are you thinking in You think about if he's real or just an image with no life inside it He looks to a watch that count from 12 to 1 The opposite direction! He said "I love what you love, I hate what you hate, I care in what you care in, the positive in your world is negative in mine, the negative in your world is positive in mine, the end of days in your world is just a beginning in my world"
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Poem I
Nov 24, 2016 19:42:39 GMT
Post by peter2 on Nov 24, 2016 19:42:39 GMT
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Poem I
Nov 26, 2016 19:51:13 GMT
Post by ahmedcrow on Nov 26, 2016 19:51:13 GMT
Alice is good character.
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Poem I
Nov 26, 2016 19:53:59 GMT
Post by ahmedcrow on Nov 26, 2016 19:53:59 GMT
I can read chapters in a computer book, but it comes to be mysterious in other reading.
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Poem I
Jun 13, 2019 16:12:39 GMT
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Post by bluewolf on Jun 13, 2019 16:12:39 GMT
121 made me think of one True love idk your poems remind me of something I went through
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Poem I
Jun 13, 2019 16:24:14 GMT
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Post by bluewolf on Jun 13, 2019 16:24:14 GMT
In the mirror I see me it looks like you one sun one moon is this my memory a painting done in blue and green can you hear the things I see is forget me not just a dream
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Poem I
Jun 14, 2019 8:46:41 GMT
Post by offramp on Jun 14, 2019 8:46:41 GMT
In the mirror I see me it looks like you one sun one moon is this my memory a painting done in blue and green can you hear the things I see is forget me not just a dream I think this is very good. I think it would be improved by using standard English punctuation. Poems that are all in small letters and have zero punctuation can be a pain to read and look too self-consciously moderne. But the ethos of the poem is very good. Post some more!
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